#1
i've always wanted an honest opinion on my songs and my friends could just be saying they're good so they don't upset me, but i want it honest
this is one of my best songs i think, so if it sucks, all my songs probably suck

Demon of Despair

I?m sat here by myself, on my own
There?s no one here, I?m all alone
I glance around, no one?s there
I?m on my own in my despair

Take my hand, hold me tight
Don?t ever let me be afraid again
I need you here by my side
To chase my pain and fears away
Take my hand, hold me tight
Don?t ever let me be afraid again
I need you here by my side
To chase my pain and fears away

I bring my knees up to my chest
And wrap my arms around my legs
I rests my forehead on my knees
And close my eyes, wishing I was free

Take my hand, hold me tight
Don?t ever let me be afraid again
I need you here by my side
To chase my pain and fears away
Take my hand, hold me tight
Don?t ever let me be afraid again
I need you here by my side
To chase my pain and fears away

I?m prisoner to the demon of despair
This devil is taking over my brain
He ain?t ever gonna let me go
I?ll live forever in this hole

Take my hand, hold me tight
Don?t ever let me be afraid again
I need you here by my side
To chase my pain and fears away
Take my hand, hold me tight
Don?t ever let me be afraid again
I need you here by my side
To chase my pain and fears away

I can?t remember how long I?ve been here
My eye releases a single silent tear
I wanna get out of here to live my life
But I no longer know if I wanna live or die

Take my hand, hold me tight
Don?t ever let me be afraid again
I need you here by my side
To chase my pain and fears away
Take my hand, hold me tight
Don?t ever let me be afraid again
I need you here by my side
To chase my pain and fears away

TAKE MY HAND, HOLD ME TIGHT!
DON?T EVER LET ME BE AFRAID AGAIN!
I NEED YOU HERE BY MY SIDE!
TO CHASE MY PAIN AND FEARS AWAY!
TAKE MY HAND, HOLD ME TIGHT!
DON?T EVER LET ME BE AFRAID AGAIN!
I NEED YOU HERE BY MY SIDE!
TO CHASE MY PAIN AND FEARS AWAY!
#3
ok... its not bad, i mean, in a good song it'd be decent lyrics, but i think it can definatly improve... i think sometimes its off beat, and it needs some memorable and original lines, cause a lot of it is badly cliched. None of it actually got me to like it, there is p;enty of room for improvement so keep it up cause i see potential. That... is my honest opinion

could u look at mine plz? ill link it here: https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=435875

thanx