#1
Written ages ago with another poem. The theme of both being New World Electric. I like the thickness of it all.

the tv and 'lets not hide anymore'

?The Plug?s stuck.?

The encapsulated juice of a nation and possibly most of the western world,
From our view, is stored in a container in front of the box.
If the glass could crack, it wouldn?t crack.
The glass would stall its view on a police man; doing crack.
Wide-eyed for the wide-screen; they?d consider an exhibit of meaningless junk,
Whilst digesting, with copious amounts of acid, a clump of rejected skin and limbs
From another runt.

With twitching eyes, they flick, we flick, the control.
Self-preservation scalds itself into our fingers, only to lose to the mother of all
Migr-
aines.
Seeing the
White dot smea-
R our view;
Makes us tear our mouths op-
En and scre-
Am out som-
E iron-
Ic laugh.
We ar-
E left free of static
Shocks and
Reality on the rocks
Of an
Evaporated sea.

As the last drops of
Blood seep from a woman?s
Vagina, a continent yawns
And a city of living rooms
Withdraw in the quietest village
In the world.

?No wait; the switch is behind the cupboard.
#2
So encapturating this one; it's how it was written see

I'll delve into this more soon, i have some philosophy, spanish and english homework to do
#3
Wow, really insightful piece. I liked the rhyme scheme and I really enjoyed the concept. My favorite part was probably in the last stanza. Wicked ideas, just wicked. Great one.
#4
Great, great, great, Loved it.

Just read brilliantly, and that middle stanza, a simple idea of channel hopping (or adbreaks?) Yet somehow it just felt more complete because of the words you also used.

Yeh, I liked it, I always give terrible critiques to your pieces, but in a way I spose that's a good thing

Jamie
#5
Just read brilliantly, and that middle stanza, a simple idea of channel hopping (or adbreaks?) Yet somehow it just felt more complete because of the words you also used.


It's to do with sight and migraines.


Thanks.

Some more would be great.
#6
Quote by thepickups
It's to do with sight and migraines.


Thanks.

Some more would be great.


Meh. I like my thoughts