#1
Crystal dreams is all I see
nothing but serenity
all along the glassy road
bouncing bears have no cares

Green grass waves the wiseman moanes
with a hint of rose
OOOhhhhh singing so long
Ohh singing so long

Cracken with a smile wide
jump inside the mouth open mind
OOhhhh singing so long...Soo long ...Sooo long

The leaves blow still
their whinning pith makes me want
a ditch to dig
and in that ditch ill tell you
the song so long will go on.

Will it end?
you will tell me
for I will tell you..Yoouuu.

Crystal..Dreams...
#2
I think this was pretty good. Just one coment, the verses were good but i think that watever the other things were need to be longer and maybe add one more verse.

I think this would go better slower sung with a slow guitar.

All in all, pretty good 7/10

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#3
Quote by metallica4727
I think this was pretty good. Just one coment, the verses were good but i think that watever the other things were need to be longer and maybe add one more verse.

I think this would go better slower sung with a slow guitar.

All in all, pretty good 7/10

Crit mine(both plz), links below
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Slow song is how i wanted it to be played. Thats good that it showed.
#4
Crystal dreams is all I see
nothing but serenity
all along the glassy road
bouncing bears have no cares
change the last line please . it sounds soo out of place

i guess this is alright . u could make it better with some more effort . if u get a chance could u crit my song " Climb the stairs and then watch yourself fall" thanks bro