#1
hmm poem, werid song begining? just worte it

the dead are rooting in their graves
the necromancer makes them his slaves
one by one they hear his call
soon their victims will join after they fall
puppets to their hunger they advance
the necromancer pulls their strings to make them dance
after sweeping through the city like a infection
he'll put them back without the slightest detection

#5
I liked it, could make a nice song if you lengthened it a bit

Maybe a more creative title too?
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#6
Nice Song I Like It Nice And Dark......make The Song Longer Give It A Beat Make A Band And Ur In Business
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#7
YO STOP MAKIN FUN OF MY SONGS JUST CUZ UR STUFF SOUNDS LIKE REGURGITATED DONKEY NUTS
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#8
Wow, that's really good! You should make it longer though, it's too awesome to be that short. You should also add to your title, make it more interesting. I really like the one line "after sweeping through the city like a infection, he'll put them back without the slightest detection", nothing short of genius! I'd give it a 10/10, just be sure to add more to it.

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