#1
ok so last week I didnt have time to post, so here is what I have written so far. Just in case you want to catch up or aren't sure about what I am doing, you can read about it here: https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=430727. Thanks for reading once again, I appreciate, crit for crit like always.

Week Two:

?174 days left?

I stood on quicksand holding a kite
Hoping the wind would take me away.
?and I wrote about it.

?173 days left?

Actually,
I am quicksand, she sinks into me
Slow and without a fight, she sinks.
The Titanic and a pleasured ocean?
But the Titanic had its moment of glee
Before it was sunken by the great sea?
Actually,
It is my heart that is quicksand
And she keeps on sinking and?

?172 days left?

The same sand, she?s sinking
In half the time and all
That is visible is from her head to her waist.
Still, it?s lovely, she is.
She sinks slowly in half the time.

?171 days left?

The sand is gone
It sank in itself.
A deep sink?

?170 days left?

Yet she stays, she stays here
There are always bits left from a wreck
And some may be visible.

Week Three:

?169 days left?

Is it wrong to think of
What can?t be?
I lust oh yes I do,
But I must to live,
To enjoy and not to fuss
About love or with it
So I lust, oh how I do.


?168 days left?

She said hi, then
The wind blew and
The sun shone;
It revealed her again
And now she?
She just smiled.

?167 days left?

Now it?s all gone,
All changed,
No more ?hi?
No more smiles.
One shall not dwell
In the past?

?166 days left?

A tree so high it floats,
Past the purple of the sky?
She wrote, not to show
But to try and let herself go
The tree so high it flies
Through the radiation of space?
That is what she called elation.

?165 days left?

She killed the sky
And made the sun hide
She collapsed the
Cosmic blast that
Made present from past
Yet, she is beautiful.
anybody wanna put anything here just let me know
#2
"But the Titanic had its moment of glee
Before it was sunken by the great sea?"

I love this line! The rest is pretty awesome too. I liked the way you organized the entire thing, with the days. Looking forward to more.

If you feel like it, please crit mine. It's called Masquerade, thanks!
Cause I love feelin' dirty
And I love feelin' cheap
And I love it when you hurt me
So drive those staples deep