#1
And I'm down another day
One step closer to Being saved
And I'm down another day
One step closer to getting back to point A
I'm Going to keep a talley of the Days
Till I'm out the dark alley and not in Disaray

Just tell me wut you guys think thanx
Last edited by BigCq8713 at Sep 24, 2006,
#3
I think it is good! Very poetic and unique! (BTW: #1 synth is pretty rude about the titles. just change it to "untitled") :-)
cHEER uP, eMO kiD!
#6
okaaaaaay...... heres what I got to saaaaaaaay.......about this chorus that you maaaaaaade....the rhymings kinda laaaaaaaaaaame.........the flows often delaaaaaaaayed....and you got too many daaaaaaaaaays....THE RHYMING SEEMS FORCED...BUT THAT TENDS TO HAPPEN WHEN YOU TRY AND RHYME TOO MANY CONSECUTIVE LINES LIKE YOU HAVE HERE....AND THE 4TH AND 6TH LINE DOESNT FLOW VERY WELL WITH THE REST OF THEM....JUST MY THOUGHTS.... CHEERS!!!
and dont pay them no mind synth...someone had to tell him.