#1
looking out,
see the same things again,
lost & found,
looking for your friends,
breaking ground,
this is not your end,
like a mouse,
you cannot help them,

what's your name?
Little girl what's your name?
what do you fear?
Little girl you're the same,
can't you see?
Little girl don't you fry,
because the beast you are,
will not tame,

You tell your friends,
you don't feel right,
you seek the end,
of your restless nights,
the book's the source,
of your late night fright,
crush the mouse,
hear the growls new heights,

what's your name?
Little girl what's your name?
what do you fear?
Little girl you're the same,
can't you see?
Little girl don't you cry,
because the beast you are,
will not tame,

Delial...
Delial, this is not for you
this is not for you [this is not for you]
this is not for you [this is not for you]
this is not for you [this is not for you]
this is not for you...

what's your name?
Little girl what's your name?
what do you fear?
Little girl you're the same,
can't you see?
Little girl don't you fry,
because the beast you are,
will not tame.
"there is a man...
playing a violin...
and the strings...
are the veins in his own arm."
Last edited by not_enough at Sep 26, 2006,
#2
Loved it 9/10 the Delial (repeating) part ruined it for me tho.... maybe put that in with a double repeating line... Like in Face Down? For Ex:

All this time is lost for at little cost
all this time is lost for at little cost
(Trust me, this is just an example i kno it sux lol)

But then have that as a screaming line then bring the chorus back in... I see this as a song exactly like Face Down, only a bit more metaly.
#3
thx a lot, I wrote that in like...4 minutes, sitting in bed on the phone I just got this melody in my head and wrote a guitar part around it
"there is a man...
playing a violin...
and the strings...
are the veins in his own arm."
#5
didnt do much for me...your chorus is too much like Lynyrd Skynyrd's song (surprisingly enough) "Whats Your Name" once I hit that part all I hear in my head is Skynyrd's tune.....In fact Im gonna go to my media player right now n play it...
#6
this is an ok song, i think your lyrics belie a talent that you obviously have, there is potential in the song but it is unfufilled. Put this song down to experience, a good one at that, and try another