#1
i wrote this song a few days ago and i think it's pretty good. i took a different aproch to this one and i wanna hear what you guys think

verse
When you look into her eyes
They tell you a story
About a man
Who sang for her each day

She left that man to sit
Alone on the rocks and watch the waves
Wondering if she thinks of him
And how she spends her days
chorus:

did it ever
occur to her
that everything he did
he had never done before
but that doesn't matter because for her he's just another of many

verse
If you ask her
She?ll say autumn has come
And that her love
Falls like the leaves
solo
chorus

verse
Will she ever remember
The man on the rocks
She has taken
Another soul from its flight

Still he sits there calling
Calling her name out to the sea
Hoping that she?ll answer
But she can?t feel his words

chorus
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#2
I like it. It has good imagry, and has the flow like it could actually be put into a song.
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#3
thanks, is anyone else gonna say anything?
Quote by steven seagull
Can I save money by using lightbulbs instead of tubes - will energy saving lightulbs last even longer?

Quote by latinosuperstud
if i buy a les paul studio and walk out into public a man in a clown and/or gorilla suit named tyrese, will come attack me and/or rape me