#1
I can tell it just by lookin? at your face,
You?ve been bored for too long,
Yeah, you?re in another place,
Waitin? for somethin? better to come along.
I can?t stand to be on my own,
Knowin? your just don?t love me,
Baby, I can?t take it, no,
I just have no room to breathe,

PRE-CHORUS
Cause you know, that I love you.
You know, that it?s true.
You know, you know, you know?

CHORUS
I don?t know if you really care about me,
I don?t know if we?ll really ever be,
Anything?anything worth callin? in love,
I don?t see it in your weakened smile,
I can?t help but wanna give it one more try,
But, baby, we?re not anything?anything worth callin? in love.

I know time?s laid its weight on you,
But I?ve been trying to keep you up,
A look in your eyes seems to say we?re through,
So let?s just let go and leave it to love.
Leave it all, let love take it on,
Cause what holdin on we?d had,
Baby, now that?s done.

PRE-CHORUS

CHORUS

(Solo)

CHORUS
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#2
i really liked that i thought it all fit together well and the chorus was actually good well done
if you don't mind could you pls crit mine "another of many" i think it's droped to the second page
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#3
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I can tell it just by lookin? at your face,
You?ve been bored for too long,
Yeah, you?re in another place,
Waitin? for somethin? better to come along.
I can?t stand to be on my own,
Knowin? your just don?t love me,
Baby, I can?t take it, no,
I just have no room to breathe,
This doesn't make sense. It's kind of lame. You say, "I can't stand to be on my own" and then you say, "I just have no room to breathe." It doesn't make sense.

PRE-CHORUS
Cause you know, that I love you.
You know, that it?s true.
You know, you know, you know?
This is incredibly unorginal.

CHORUS
I don?t know if you really care about me,
I don?t know if we?ll really ever be,
Anything?anything worth callin? in love,
I don?t see it in your weakened smile,
I can?t help but wanna give it one more try,
But, baby, we?re not anything?anything worth callin? in love.
I really like the "Anything woth callin' love" and the "I don't see it in your weakend smile", but other than that I don't like much else.

I know time?s laid its weight on you,
But I?ve been trying to keep you up,
A look in your eyes seems to say we?re through,
So let?s just let go and leave it to love.
Leave it all, let love take it on,
Cause what holdin on we?d had,
Baby, now that?s done.
I like this one okay, I mean, it's not fantastic by any means, but it's better than the first verse. I don't like the part that says, "A look in your eyes seems to say we're through", though. It's a stupid part, in my opinion. So, replace it.
PRE-CHORUS

CHORUS

(Solo)

CHORUS


It's an okay song, but needs some work.
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#4
to be very honest with you, i didn't like this all that much. it was just a series of cliches put together that appears in any pop song on mtv. a little too pink for my taste. maybe in the correct context it'd be nice, though.
#5
okay i completely apprecaite the input! anything is good! yeah i thought it was kinda w/e when i was done with it lol so thanks a bunch and any suggestions are loved!
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