#1
please offer advice and crit
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Your heaven and hell do coincide
on a place , it seems, not so divine
since you can't see, open your mind
cause im starting to feel this genocide

don't preach me while you follow blind
and disregard attempts to pacify
the black fog rolls in, but no one wants to die
heaven and hell coincide, you know..

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thats all the progress i've made so far, and the next verse is without inspiration so far. Your point of view would be appreciated.