#1
I originally put this song in for the lyrics, but now that i have some actual music to it, i'd like to see what you guys think of it.

http://hellbent.dmusic.com/music/ -- "Another Try GUITAR VERSION"

And also if you want to do it like a singalong, here's the lyrics for it so far (My singing voice sucks, so i didnt even attempt that yet)

Another Try

-Verse A-
Sometimes the world, gets to me
futures haunting, constantly
few things, that keep me alive
Oh so earging to, take the dive
-Verse B-
Nothing to do, nowhere to go
Wanting to make, that final throw
but something in-side of me
wants to keep, living free

-Chorus-
You mean so much to me
somewhere else i'd rather be
lingering doubts are in my head
just looking to hold you
again...hold you again

-Verse-
Take another Drink, to clear the mind
play another game, of hide and find
the memories, come crashing by
take another hit, to get real high

-Chorus-
You mean so much to me
somewhere else i'd rather be
lingering doubts are in my head
just looking to hold you
again...hold you again

-Bridge-
Just
Want
To
Make It
True
From
Me
To You

-Verse-
take another pull, take another shot
don't think, that i forgot
thinking that, I made a mistake
this is how i know, it wasn't fake

-Solo-
70's Japan Greco SuperPower
Amps: '65 TRRI - Peavey Classic 50 4x10 - Epiphone VJ Head (Modded) - 2x12 Celestion Greenback Cab
FX: BK Tube Driver - EH Small Stone - MXR CC
Acoustics: Breedlove ADSM20 - Alveraz 5021 12-String
Last edited by HellBent1337 at Sep 29, 2006,
#2
I like the synth effect, what is that a keyboard? I'd love to use that in my music. Really nicely put together, reminds of that Everlast song, What its like. I take all the drums and synth are outside programs?

Anyway I like the feel of this, tis quite good. And your lyrics seem to fit nicely with the song. And you have the same tone that my friend has. I feel the solo was abit too short and repetitive, maybe even too slow? I don't know could just be personal taste.

Good job anyway.

Crit mine? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=440100
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#4
Quote by yawn
Blech...the format doesn't work for the computer I'm using


It can also be found on my dmusic page: http://hellbent.dmusic.com/ Called "Another Try - Guitar Version"
70's Japan Greco SuperPower
Amps: '65 TRRI - Peavey Classic 50 4x10 - Epiphone VJ Head (Modded) - 2x12 Celestion Greenback Cab
FX: BK Tube Driver - EH Small Stone - MXR CC
Acoustics: Breedlove ADSM20 - Alveraz 5021 12-String