#1
Right. I got enough bravado to post some more Lyrics. Wrote down some lines and then ended up completing it. Can't think of a great name but eh. I hope I'm improving. Hope it isn't that icky emo thing. Crit for Crit Always!

Caging the Guided.


My apostles I give you all my knowledge
I give you the gift to preach word
Listen and remeber all that you have heard.

Cause one day you'll ascend
to the heavens long as you believe
the gods will let us rejoin again
I'm sure 100% percent

When the time came
I rejoiced as my soul began to fly
Untill I realized I was falling.

Decending downward into the cage
With my last words I pray
Please save these apostles
before it's too late.

Sighing.
Oh did I sigh
I cried and cried
Eyes filled to the brink
With tears not for my own despair
but
I sent my apostles to hell.

Decending downward into the cage
With my last words I pray
Please save these apostles
before it's too late.

As I fell to the ground
Gave up on all but one last prayer
Please the real truth
Give those people a chance.

Decending downward into the cage
With my last words I pray
Please save these apostles
before it's too late.

Before it's too late.
Last edited by Granswar at Sep 29, 2006,
#2
What a twist! it's very poetic, and it doesn't have to be emo unless you plan on screaming the entire song. I can somewhat imagine Led Zeppelin playing this song and i love how there is no real closure at the end. I'm glad you posted this, i liked it
#3
wow i really like it
i agree with the other guy its poetic and i dont find it emo
couple lines i might change like this one -->"I'm sure 100% percent"
the meanin of it fits well but sumhow i think it cud be worded a bit differently
also this line --> "Untill I realized I was falling"
same thing fits rite in with the song but maybe cud be reworded a bit
anyway those are just a couple lines i might change but its a very strong song and i really like it good job

crit mine? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=438020