#1
Crit for crit. Just leave a link.

You can't keep him quiet
He'll still speak his mind
Tell you what he thinks
Giving it out raw

They were right to say
You can't handle the truth
Trust me when I say
Its gonna hurt

Despite this all
He still spoke
Laid it all before you
Not a single lie

Is it right to say
He has it all wrong?
Should the truth be watered down
Or handed out raw?


They were right to say
You can't handle the truth
Trust me when I say
Its gonna hurt

I WANT IT RAW!
#3
i see this as a punk song tell me if i'm wrong, the flow is fairly simple (which is no bad thing) it runs pretty easily in my mind. apart from this.

Despite this all
He still spoke
Laid it all before you
Not a single lie

i stuttered on this part, although i see nothing wrong with it lyrically maybe a rearrangment. this is just opinion
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#4
Yeah, probably going to have a punkish feel to it. That part their is kind of like a bridge. Its just different from the rest. Thanks for posting, you got something you want me to look at?
#5
It was an Ok song.I like the title, and the first Verse sums it up perfectly. Though a little short its definately raw, just the way you like it.
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