badasskurt
Everybody should rock!
Join date: Mar 2006
31 IQ
#1
Hey guys!

Have made a few songs on PTab so i thought, "what the hell, why not post some?!" So I shall start with a song called "Gods Creation". Its not the final title, just something i came up with.

Please give constructive criticism only!

Enjoy!

NB! Seems like I've put 2 songs in the zipped file, but Gods Creation is the file named !10. The other one is called No Comprehension, so you know that!
Attachments:
Gods Creation.zip
When a man lies, he murders some part of the world.

These are the pale deaths which men miscall their lives.

All this I cannot bear to witness any longer.

Cannot the kingdom of salvation take me home?

-Cliff Burton
Last edited by badasskurt at Oct 6, 2006,
cool#9
next satriani
Join date: Feb 2006
309 IQ
#2
its too repeptitive on the low e string, its like, you're rapping it, slowly
the solo has its moments when its pretty good, but it also has its moments where it just sucks
didn't like the outro
i couldn't listen to the whole thing at once, i had to skip to each new part, too much repetition
but not bad
*'-'*
UG's Bastard of Christ
Join date: Aug 2005
1,290 IQ
#3
I critted gods creation. and first off let me say cool#9 is absolutely write it is way to repetetive and in my opinion too slow. When i sped the song up to 220bpm it was musch more enjoyable. So if you keep change the tempo to 220 you will have a relly good song on your hands. Good Job
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Join date: Jul 2006
726 IQ
#4
the solo part after the tapping is pretty damn good. the stuff before the solo is too repetitive. maybe dont repeat everything 4 times IMO.
badasskurt
Everybody should rock!
Join date: Mar 2006
31 IQ
#5
thanks guys!

yeah, i think its a bit much on the e-string too i know repeating things 4 times each is bit boring, but when i take 2 or 3 it doesnt seem to fit... shall try out with 200+ bpm
When a man lies, he murders some part of the world.

These are the pale deaths which men miscall their lives.

All this I cannot bear to witness any longer.

Cannot the kingdom of salvation take me home?

-Cliff Burton