MOOSE ATTACK!!!
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Join date: May 2005
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#1
I've been making this song for a while. I guess it is somewhat metalcorish. It is around five minutes long.

Any suggestions would be helpful.

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Last edited by MOOSE ATTACK!!! at Jan 9, 2007,
KaMoRa
Now Thats Metal
Join date: Apr 2006
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#2
the only think i really liked was the main riff, but the rest wasnt good. I play metalcore stuff myself, so I can tell you that you should learn a bit more and give it your own spin, because to many people have the same style.
ouchies
UG's OG
Join date: Jan 2006
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#3
It was alright. I think where the rhythm guitar played only open on the low e string, you should have played a power chord to give it a little thicker. I liked your main riff the most


Crit mine?

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=448390


edit: i totally didnt see that you critted mine already, haha sorry.
Last edited by ouchies at Oct 17, 2006,
cool#9
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#4
meh, i'm not into metal and metalcore that much, so i think it was pretty repetitive, and that 8 minutes is way over-using each riff, maybe thats just me though
Spark1284
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#5
u have some really good riffs in there, when u try putting them together it gets messy, and try hitting "j" in bars that have huge gaps and stuff to justify it out. the metalcore is gay like all metalcore and it makes ur riffs sound less cool than they are. just keep writing and i really think itll all start comming together. oh yeahh dont just put rhythm part of the solo, either wrote the solo or dont, no matter how bad it might sound, u cant get good at it if u dont try it
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l3fty_g3n1u5_89
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#6
really like the main rifft
the whole song was just like metalica
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MOOSE ATTACK!!!
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#7
Quote by Spark1284
u have some really good riffs in there, when u try putting them together it gets messy, and try hitting "j" in bars that have huge gaps and stuff to justify it out. the metalcore is gay like all metalcore and it makes ur riffs sound less cool than they are. just keep writing and i really think itll all start comming together. oh yeahh dont just put rhythm part of the solo, either wrote the solo or dont, no matter how bad it might sound, u cant get good at it if u dont try it

I don't understand the metalcore making my riffs sound worse. What does that even mean? I liked your tips on the solo though, I may just leave one out.
onebetter
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Join date: Aug 2006
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#8
i can't say this was a very good song. The main riff was good and the arpeggios in the intro weren't bad, but the chorus was really bland and I think you overused the perfect 4ths, because in a chorus like you have which sets up melody, too much dissonance is bad. The breakdowns are really what killed the song for me. The first one was bad, and the second was wasn't much better. I think you should probably take the decent riffs from the song and start from scratch. And, 8 minutes is ridiculous when it could have been half that length and sounded exactly the same.
Spark1284
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#9
alot of people will hear a metlacore cord progression and just sign the whole song away as crap. basically metalcore is dead and has been overplayed and if ur not gonna right a riff thats original then dont bother at all. oh yeah and ur changes in the tempo of the song are painful. its pretty hard to change the speed of a song and make it sound good unless its double time or half time or sumthing. just randomly messing with the bpm isnt such a great idea, it stands out and sounds less than satisfactory
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soo much n00bage
Quote by xX Maverick Xx
sorry to bust everyones bubble but lamb of god arent "hardcore" theyre death metal, and therefore metal.
Masochist_Lust
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#11
I really, really liked it. I thought the harmonizing was awesome, and the chorus I think it was, even though it was really simple. There was a H/P part near the end that I think was too fast to sound good, but overall, it was awesome.

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