ouchies
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Join date: Jan 2006
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#1
Yeah, i just want to know if that second riff is retarded?


and is there a transition needed? like, is it way too sudden?


thanks, ill crit yours too
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HumanitysDeath
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Join date: Jun 2004
264 IQ
#3
What you have sounds good.
But you dont have much, so update us ASAP.
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Bodomizer
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Join date: Jul 2006
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#4
i think you abused the open d i guess. the melodic parts sound good though.
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Join date: Nov 2003
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#6
The high harmonized part that's all over the song doesn't say much to me and sounds too optimistic but it's sort of memorable. I like the rest of it though; the dropped D parts have interesting enough rhythms to work.
beadhangingOne
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Join date: Jul 2005
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#7
this will sound insane with drums cuz the rhythm is intricate, i think everything was fine except for that lick at the beginning, i donno it seems unnecessary to me. Throw in a solo after what you have so far and this will be very sick! gj so far

here is a link to mine

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=471237
Fatt Sorum
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Join date: Oct 2005
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#8
sounds fine, just feel free to change chords at the end part
i like the melodic thing, it sounded great

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Join date: Aug 2006
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#9
Really good. I just think the very first measure needs to be harmonized or something. Because the one guitar just playing the 6-8 thing sounds weird. Other than that, besides being very generic, it was a good sounding peice.

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Join date: Oct 2006
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#10
Really didn't like the intro, but after 20 seconds it got a bit better.. I'm not a metalcore fan, tho. Try to add some originality to the piece and it'll sound better.

5/10

Needs work but shows some potential (the 2nd riff). Crit mine plx.