D_y_p26
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#1
Here is a song my friend and I wrote in two days. We arranged all the parts, even the vocals for the verse. I would say this song has a GnR or Iron Maiden sound to it.

You guys are welcome to crit my work, and maybe help me with the chorus vocals which I'm stuck on.
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MilichichiBass
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#3
it's not bad. I can understand how it can sound like those bands you described. Except, it sounds to mellow cause it sounds like it's all on key board for most of it and only on the very slow parts can you hear the bass/ guitar. Not bad though.
Bodomizer
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#4
i liked it. even though it wasn't really my style, i still loved the composition. good job man.
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D_y_p26
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#5
Quote by MilichichiBass
it's not bad. I can understand how it can sound like those bands you described. Except, it sounds to mellow cause it sounds like it's all on key board for most of it and only on the very slow parts can you hear the bass/ guitar. Not bad though.

ummm..all the parts are guitar, I think it sounds like keyboard cuz its too "midi"
ouchies
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#6
I liked it, it kept my attention the whole time. You had a lot of measures that had too many or not enough notes though
AdamDK
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#7
Pretty good, I'd reccommend you sort the red bars, but overall a very good composition. Nice structure, well influenced, cool progressions, etc.
D_y_p26
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#8
hmm I didn't notice the red bars.....whats wrong if theres a red bar and how do u fix it
WlCmToTheJungle
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#9
that means that the notes in the bar are (in this case) more than 4 beats long, if u want a note to continue to the next bar u tie it in the next bar
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Stolenidentity1
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#10
the bass really sounds gnr influenced, with the fills, love it

I wouldnt say much on iron maiden influence but really really gnr influenced, another thing turn down that keyboard sound, is that supposed to be voice?

the solo was nice as well, but i cant even look at the gp5 i would like to see it tabbed
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D_y_p26
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#12
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there you go...no more red bars...

sweet thanks