Nunwhxre 666
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Join date: Aug 2006
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#1
Well, I've been bored so I've been writing alot of stuff. I don't think this is really any good, but I figured it wouldn't hurt to get some criticism or suggestions. I don't think I'm gonna go anywhere with this, unless I get alot of good crits, then I might do something with it. But yeahhh, this isn't one of my serious peices. So whatever.
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Nunwhxre 666
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#3
Hmm. I could tone down a little on the rhythm. Because now that you said something, I think the rhythms chugging kinda drowns out the leads.
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#4
there is no lead theres a rhythm part that doesnt stick to one string, this could be confused as a lead i suppose. and regardless u have one riff with 4 chourds over it, dont post riffs cuz it wastes time, get at least most of your song or all but say a solo or an interlude and then see what people think
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#5
The riffs got boring because they all seemed really similiar to each other. instead of having one guitar just doing chords, i would harmonize them or something.
Nunwhxre 666
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#6
Eh, I might just give this up. I don't really like it anyway. And I've been trying to work on it and I just keep failing.
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