robert_smith
dimebag is forever
Join date: Mar 2004
287 IQ
#1
Hey all, need a little crit on a song i have- i'm going for a children of bodom/sinergy type sound. The song isn't finished yet but if you could crit what i have so far i'd be grateful.

cheers
Attachments:
Potentially Lethal.zip
MoTiV MASCOTS


MOLLY Da cOOL cAT
DIXIE The dAMEnTAd DoG
SiLLy SCRUFF DaNgERoUs DoGgY
And dont forget Hamish's bro,Finlay!!!!!!!!!!!

sorry, it was too hilarious to miss...
demiphoenix
Get off my goddamn cloud
Join date: May 2006
186 IQ
#2
I don't have guitar pro five, sorry, but i'm loving the title.
shrediquette
Registered User
Join date: Dec 2006
49 IQ
#5
Hey man,

This is definitely a pretty nice sounding peice you've put together. My favorite section by far is verse two, it's probably the most original sounding part of the song. My main criticism is the way that you end off verse 2, those last couple of decending notes just don't seem to fit in too well, maybe try to mix in some other notes instead.

here's an idea i came up with just playing around with it:

------------------------------------------------------9-12-9-------
--------14---12-14-12-----------------------10-----------10---
-11-------------------------11---7-11-7---9--------------------9~
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----------------------------------------------------------------------

I apologize for the weak tab but it'll have to do. You mentioned you were going after a children of bodom type sound...these guys LOVE to sweep. I don't know if youre into that but if you sweep that little appreggio i added toward the end it would sound pretty sick. Or you could bust out a nice pinch harmonic on that last note as well which would sound decent.

Just some ideas you can throw around. cheers.
Last edited by shrediquette at Dec 7, 2006,
Marevix
Registered User
Join date: Dec 2006
21 IQ
#6
The riff from verse 1 and 3 are obviously ripped from Deadnight Warrior. The intro isn't too bad. Verse 2 has a good melody, but like the others mentioned, it needs a little tweaking right at the end.