Sum41Freek
The Canadian Firecrotch
Join date: May 2006
98 IQ
#7
The intro sounds great, but as you move forward (10 secs) it starts sounding like a Slipknot riff. The repeated open notes (im guessing they're open notes) I don't like. Maybe have like three open, then a high note to spice it up a bit. Crit mine?
aprescott_27
Friggatriskaidekaphobic
Join date: Nov 2004
859 IQ
#8
Maybe instead of having the fretted notes in the fifth measure a step apart, make them a third apart to add some harmony and not just dissonance.

Other than that. 6.5/10. The preverse does need some spicing up. And the rest is pretty good.

EDIT: Crit mine? Link is in my sig.
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And2001PT
Banned
Join date: Aug 2004
224 IQ
#11
Hmmm... the pre-verse still needs alot of work.
Don't use powerchords all the time, learn to use single notes.
Also, some fast, driving, palm muted notes would make it better.
As for the verse, it sounds too nice.
Maybe using the tritone a little bit to spice it up?
Metal is not really my field, but, my 2 cents.
And2001PT
Banned
Join date: Aug 2004
224 IQ
#13
It's an interval.
It was often refered to as the devil in music for it's very clashing, dissonant, and, evil if you will, quality.
It's three whole tones apart.
It's called an augmented fourth or dimished fifth.
Example: open e string. 6th fret e string.
Try it...
Sounds good, don't it... ^^
Very common in heavy metal, sounds very dark and heavy.
Ryioku
UG Senior Member
Join date: Jul 2006
1,294 IQ
#16
i hope you don't mind... but i took your little riff and added a bit of my own little style to it, just to see if you like it. if not, ah well, at least i tried.
Attachments:
metalcoreryioku.zip
Last edited by Ryioku at Dec 18, 2006,
face_haver
Registered User
Join date: Jul 2006
238 IQ
#17
Basically the first bar is not too bad. THe rest isn't great. Doing the same rythm but just ascedning instead of descending doesn't sound good as in A7X not good and you don't wanna go there. But the first riff shows potential. Just scrap everything but the first bar listen to some metalcore not fashioncore popular stuff like atreyu try darkest hour, all shall perish (deathcore but still) and maybe dillinger escape plan and norma jean they're all metalcore in some way and it should give you perspective on what sorts of sounds to look for, not copy but look for what they have in common.

Check out mine if you have GP5 i have 4 metalcore songs.
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=496056

if not i'lll put midi's up