'StoleN'
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Join date: Dec 2006
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#3
it was really eh. the only thing i liked was the chord progression. Right before chorus. You should come up with some better riffs. Use more chords. and dont do the same thing over and over again.

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MadMudgeN
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Join date: Sep 2003
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#4
I find this very trite and tired. Sorry, but both the verse repeat way too much for my tastes cuz they both get old real fast and don't stop playing. The chorus is alright. Then the interlude is basically the same thing as the verses man! You should try expanding on the riff you've already written and don't be afraid to just try stuff; that way you can deviate some and still use all of the notes of the key and chords of the key you're in to make it way more interesting. 5/10 man. Crit Mine Please: http://ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=485226
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GiantRaven
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Join date: Apr 2004
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#5
Bit bland from what i've heard at the start, the lead just looks like a run up and down a scale...

The silences are annoying and repeated the verse 8 times just gets old

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NovemberRain273
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Join date: Oct 2005
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#6
Hmmm a little bit repetive. The lead doesnt have any feel to it, it really seemed out of place and unnecessary. For the drums, try not to just follow whatever beat the guitar is playing, give it more variety. As for the riffs, not too bad. But true, repeating the verse 8 times is pretty boring.
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