NovemberRain273
I don't like Guns n Roses
Join date: Oct 2005
5,451 IQ
#1
Heres a song ive been working on for a couple of days. Its pretty much finished. Not much more to say lol, except enjoy
Attachments:
Revolution.zip
Alta Vera - My real life alternative rock band.
Ashen Spire - My personal metal band.

Super Mario, F-Zero & Dragonball Z covers!

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Fatt Sorum
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Join date: Oct 2005
819 IQ
#2
Loved the intro, it was great, espicially with the sound effects.

Re-intro was even better, loved the lead part.

The chorus was awesome, my favourite part of the song - until I heard the interlude

For ****s sake mate, how can I critique a song where there's nothing wrong?


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Fallenblood
C'mon, yell at me.
Join date: Oct 2006
305 IQ
#3
I like this song a lot. The only advice I could give you is... have the gunshots and helicopter part a little longer, then have a pause, then have the birds tweeting, and make the song start as aggressive as it gets I didn't like the part where it kinda slows down, but otherwise, it's great.
Rockford_rocks
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Join date: Apr 2006
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#4
Oooh...
I really like this.
The gunshots and helicopter in the beginning remind me of Metallica's One
Honestly, i find no flaws in this song.
Good work!
Burning_Angel
Valar Morghulis
Join date: Jun 2006
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#5
Great bassline, and great beat.

Great guitar parts. Except theres something about drop d that I dont like....
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f12button
Registered User
Join date: Dec 2006
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#6
Very nice. I don't see anything wrong with it. I love the fast riffs with open notes. Those are all my favorite.

And the sound effects? Beautiful.

I wonder if you could put words to this?

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RPotts
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Join date: Jan 2006
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#7
Ok, so its gotta lotta great stuff for a metal song, acoustic intro -check, heavy distorted guitar cutting in -check, even has the helicopter noises and birds. Also, has a very composed, shreddy solo. The tempo change could be better, I'm more a fan of double time, it feels very natural, but 120 to 180 is 1 and a half times, like going from standard notes to everything in triplets. Kinda weird, but not horrible, plus if you bumped it up to 240 (double time) youve have to change the solo lest it be ridiculously fast.
The only real problem I have with the song, is it doesn't seem to have a good outro. I'm a fan of driving outros with the snare on every beat for about 8 or 16 measures beating out a last riff a few times and then ending, I think if you tacked one on it would be good. And I don't even like metal, ha.

EDIT: I went back and changed the solo to section to double time and I think it's better, you should give it a try, listen to the transitions, they're much more fluid, since the drums dont even change initially because you go from 8ths to quarters but double the tempo. It's a cool effect.
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Last edited by RPotts at Dec 27, 2006,
Roxxin Biatch
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Join date: Jun 2004
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#8
Haha, nice try with the sound effects.

I like the leads and the harmonies. And the breakdown's great.

Usually these kinds of songs have faster bass lines than you had in places, but that's probably me just being picky. Then again, surely that's the idea of criticising. And the ending is way too abrupt. Try writing another riff or putting a good variation on one of your other riffs and using that.

I give that a 3/π .

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siddyjain
Mr Coffee
Join date: Mar 2006
629 IQ
#9
Only thing I can say is that the D# chord sounds kinda dissonant...maybe try an F?
Although I spose you wouldda tryed them all...
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chris_122
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Join date: Mar 2006
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#10
Great song. I loved every part of it. The intro with the creepy acoustic guitar and with the sound effects were very sweet. Every riff was also kick ass too. The solo, though a bit short, was great. This song reminded me of Trivium's "Like Light To Flies", at many parts. Overall, great song, can't wait to hear some more.
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