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I'm Bleeding Heartache - Red
2 13%
Sailing in caravelles - Blue
13 87%
Voters: 15.
The Hurt Within
Preserving the name...
Join date: Feb 2004
10,564 IQ
#1
I'm Bleeding Heartache (And You're the Mistake)

I'm bleeding heartache
like I'm the mistake
she says I am
Is she blaming me
for what she did?
I don't understand
how can she yell at me
when she deserves it

She's the worst thing
that ever happened to me
yet she still brings
me falling to my knees
every thought of her
makes it harder to breathe
and she's never far from my thoughts



Sailing in Caravelles

Pound by pound
this feint rain is worth its weight in gold.
For nothing decieves a sunset more
than a feigned silver-lining.
Windowsills doused with droughts
become places of rest.
As if a rose in a deluge,
is a flower dipped in dew to others.
Theres something ground-breaking
in watching rain fall,
when its you they're all aiming for.
So be the first,
or the last,
to stare a mass metaphoric murderer
in the face.
I, however, remain
open eyed, as a mark or respect.
As if to say; "I see where you're coming from."

But I said in reply; "I can't see for the rain,
pouring through my shattered window panes."
For I am the last to see,
this is the second storm of the century.
Filth, pure filth... That's what you are.
Last edited by The Hurt Within at Jan 1, 2007,
The Hurt Within
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Join date: Feb 2004
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#2
This is a 1v1 mate, a poetry 1v1 there is no genre.....

And if you think everything sounds emo, you probably are.
Filth, pure filth... That's what you are.
The Hurt Within
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#7
Quote by rustic_metal
hmmm...i went blue...


Its courtesy, as blue is mine.
Filth, pure filth... That's what you are.
FrenchyFungus
"UG God"
Join date: May 2005
3,872 IQ
#8
Blue, if only for knowing the difference between your and you're

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paper_hearts
Bled
Join date: Dec 2006
32 IQ
#11
Damn You're, I had it right when I made the thread, just so everyone knows I know the difference, it's just that apparently I don't know the difference at 3 in the morning.

BLUE
AccidentsHappen
Registered User
Join date: May 2006
476 IQ
#12
blue ftw. Nice job to both of you though, it was close.
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.Sidewinder.
UG Member
Join date: Feb 2006
95 IQ
#14
Blue.

I'm sorry, Red just doesn't do it for me. Too standard, in my opinion.
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Same difference? Meaning its differences are exactly alike, and are parallel in opposite? So they have the exact same thing wrong with them. Two identical twins have scars, but the scars are in the exact same place, so their differences are the same.
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I NEVER LIKED THE RAIN
Join date: Sep 2005
462 IQ
#15
Theres something ground-breaking
in watching rain fall,
when its you they're all aiming for.

^that part in blue is pretty cool. I vote for blue overall, like what has been said before, while red isn't bad, it's pretty standard and for a lack of a better word mundane.
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The Hurt Within
Preserving the name...
Join date: Feb 2004
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#16
Good match, I'm sorry it seemed unfair, I never really looked into his writing, nor knew what piece he'd use.

So anyway gd match.
Filth, pure filth... That's what you are.
paper_hearts
Bled
Join date: Dec 2006
32 IQ
#17
Thanks, and don't worry about it, I'd read your stuff and knew what I was getting into, now I have a better idea of how I compare to the veteran writers of S&L.