Fallenblood
C'mon, yell at me.
Join date: Oct 2006
305 IQ
#1
Yet another attempt at songwriting by me, I hope I did better this time. Please tell me what do you think.

I know it might be a bit repetitive, but I guess it won't sound that way with the vocals.
Attachments:
Keeper of Dreams.zip
Last edited by Fallenblood at Jan 1, 2007,
Liam Efting
The Wiz
Join date: Dec 2006
87 IQ
#3
That kind of hurt my ears to listen to.

You need to learn some theory and techinque when it comes to string arrangement, it sounds much better if you do realistic sounding strings rather than 80's sounding string runs.

The timing is way off between all the instruments. Not cool.

You could easily make something good here, just put some effort into it.
Alternate_rock
I fly like paper
Join date: Jun 2005
607 IQ
#4
yeah, i agree the timing was of on some parts, the keyboard at the begining repeated it self too much for my liking, you could definatly make this into a better song,