#1
I'm not very happy with this but I cant be bothered to re-write it, I present to you... 'Tempo of the Flames'

[verse1]
For my homeland I fought things ancient and cruel
I fought for a land where flames rule!
I found darkness inside the night
I will not fall without a fight

[chorus]
I fought for the tempo of the flames
I fought against the evil on the plains
To the death is how we’ll fight
For dragon hearts at night

[verse2]
I saw the spark of steel in the morning sun
Lighting the dark for the war we won
My battles nearly done
Victory shall be mine
For a land where the war was won
I fought for fire
I fought for the churches spire
I fought for flames
I fought for the plains

[chorus]
I fought for the tempo of the flames
I fought against the evil on the plains
To the death is how we’ll fight
For dragon hearts at night

[verse1]
For my homeland I fought things ancient and cruel
I fought for a land where flames rule!
I found darkness inside the night
I will not fall without a fight

[chorus]
I fought for the tempo of the flames
I fought against the evil on the plains
To the death is how we’ll fight
For dragon hearts at night

[Verse3]
I fought to restore the mystery of the moon
The death of death will be with us soon
I carved your name in to solid wood
With the flash of light on an angels hood


[verse4]
I dream in the fields of desire
I awoke to find myself in a lake fire
I called you my dreamer of night
I saw you as the bringer of light
Hide away from your tears
I’ll keep you away from your hated fears

[chorus]
I fought for the tempo of the flames
I fought against the evil on the plains
To the death is how we’ll fight
For dragon hearts at night

[verse5]
To the death is how we’ll fight
For dragon hearts at night
To the death is how we fought
For the dragon hearts we sought
Raise your chalice my brother
Raise it high
To catch the fire that falls from the sky
#2
Quote by Bal_Sagoth
I'm not very happy with this but I cant be bothered to re-write it, I present to you... 'Tempo of the Flames'

[verse1]
For my homeland I fought things ancient and cruel
I fought for a land where flames rule!
I found darkness inside the night
I will not fall without a fight
I liked it, I can feel the flow.

[chorus]
I fought for the tempo of the flames
I fought against the evil on the plains
To the death is how we’ll fight
For dragon hearts at night
Again, I like it. Not much to say.

[verse2]
I saw the spark of steel in the morning sun
Lighting the dark for the war we won
My battles nearly done
Victory shall be mine
For a land where the war was won
I fought for fire
I fought for the churches spire
I fought for flames
I fought for the plains
This verse I didn't like so much. The flow kind of cut off after "Lighting the dark for the war we won" because you shortened the next line. Also, I didn't like the "I fought for fire... I fought for the plains" part, mostly because I didn't feel flow here at all.

[chorus]
I fought for the tempo of the flames
I fought against the evil on the plains
To the death is how we’ll fight
For dragon hearts at night

[verse1]
For my homeland I fought things ancient and cruel
I fought for a land where flames rule!
I found darkness inside the night
I will not fall without a fight

[chorus]
I fought for the tempo of the flames
I fought against the evil on the plains
To the death is how we’ll fight
For dragon hearts at night

[Verse3]
I fought to restore the mystery of the moon
The death of death will be with us soon
I carved your name in to solid wood
With the flash of light on an angels hood
Again, I like it... just like the 1st verse, I can feel the flow. And I can sing it in my head, that's always good.

[verse4]
I dream in the fields of desire
I awoke to find myself in a lake fire
I called you my dreamer of night
I saw you as the bringer of light
Hide away from your tears
I’ll keep you away from your hated fears
Kind of different since your other verses are only four lines (besides the 2nd, of course). I still like all of this verse except "I awoke to find myself in a lake fire" it kind of cut off the flow.

[chorus]
I fought for the tempo of the flames
I fought against the evil on the plains
To the death is how we’ll fight
For dragon hearts at night

[verse5]
To the death is how we’ll fight
For dragon hearts at night
To the death is how we fought
For the dragon hearts we sought
Very nice, I could see how this would end a song... maybe just kind of fade off getting softer and softer as the verse progresses.

All in all, I can definitely see this as a hit sometime in the future... if you decide to go that far =P.
Can't wait to hear music/recording.

Crit mine?
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