#1
i need help with the second verse . i have to write another 4 sentences to complete it and theres nothing i cant think about so can you please help me complete the song. and ofcourse if you think there is something that should be improved notify me .

Illusion / Polyphobia

Verse :
Shes gone
now there is no one there to miss to
no one there to kiss anymore
pressure keeps hanging beside my head
pressure that no one understands

She said
That everything has been changed
and like the rain she just fade away
without saying when she will return
and i turned back for a second and she was gone

Chorus:
There is something in my mind
There is something preety wild
There is somthing in my head
There is something , Something really bad.

Its all of been illusion
Just another creepy dream
and that shes all gone
there is no pain that i can feel.

Chorus:
There is something in my mind
There is something preety wild
There is somthing in my head
There is something , Something really bad.

{ Guitar solo }

There is something in my mind
There is something preety wild
There is somthing in my head
There is something , Something really bad.
#2
More then likely sounds better when singing it. I suggest adding another verse, and have a pre-chorus, that describes what it is that is driving you mad.
#3
ok im rele gunna skrew with thing but in a good way
im editing to whole thing, ur choice if ur gunna keep it

Verse :
Shes gone
now there's someone to miss
no one there to kiss anymore
pressure keeps hanging beside my head
pressure that no one understands

She said
That everything has changed
and like the clouds, she built up and faded away
without me knowing when she will return
and i turned around for a second
and she was gone...

Chorus:
There is something in my mind
There is something preety wild
There is somthing in my head
There is something , Something really bad.

Its all of been illusion
Just another creepy dream
and that shes all gone
that i can feel and pain*

Chorus:
There is something in my mind
There is something preety wild
There is somthing in my head
There is something , Something really bad.

{ Guitar solo }

There is something in my mind
There is something preety wild
There is somthing in my head
There is something , Something really bad

*note, inversion(swapping around words to get a rhyme) is not used in songwriting by proffesional songwriters if lyrics are important to you(i meann if you're like some sreamo band with like uncomprehendable words, np)

over all, very good
James

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