#1
This song goes well with some music I wrote, but I don't know if it will translate well without it.

I've seen you before
A long time ago
Maybe in a dream
One afternoon
Your face, your eyes
Familiar of a love...long ago
Did you leave me then?
Were we just pretending?
To love, to love...I don't know

You left me
Like a broken bird
Lost in the winds
Of summertime
Mended wings and forgot the things
That weren't worth remembering
And then you flew away
And then you flew away
Yes...now I remember...
My sweet Angela...

Where did you go?
Emerald Eyes
In between the blue
Of sea and sky
Left with the winds
of Autumn
And now your back
With the falling snow
Stay here
Angela
Until Spring
Wakes us once more
#2
You left me
Like a broken bird
Lost in the winds
Of summertime
Mended wings and forgot the things
That weren't worth remembering
And then you flew away
And then you flew away
Yes...now I remember...
My sweet Angela...


the 5th line "forgot the things" i think it sound better "forgot things"

well thats me but it kinda sounds like a poem that way either way its urs so do watever with it
#3
Actually the 5th line would sound better as 'mended wings and forgotten things'

Better as a poem then a song I think, its very nice though
#4
Quote by Serrana
This song goes well with some music I wrote, but I don't know if it will translate well without it.

I've seen you before
A long time ago
Maybe in a dream
One afternoon
Your face, your eyes
Familiar of a love...long ago
Did you leave me then?
Were we just pretending?
To love, to love...I don't know

like the beginning. im not sure how you meant for the second half of the verse to be sung (guess thats what you were talking about) but it seems pretty good an not overly cliche or anything

You left me
Like a broken bird
Lost in the winds
Of summertime
Mended wings and forgot the things
That weren't worth remembering
And then you flew away
And then you flew away
Yes...now I remember...
My sweet Angela...

the thing about the broken bird and mending wings has been done a lot. it works fine but if you wanted to be original you could think of something differant for that

Where did you go?
Emerald Eyes
In between the blue
Of sea and sky
Left with the winds
of Autumn
And now your back
With the falling snow
Stay here
Angela
Until Spring
Wakes us once more
i like it well enough. nothing incredible but its nice simple writing that does what its supposed to.

ya basically what i said for the last vcerse sums it all up well, simple but good, not great or anything but its pretty nice writing IMO. not much to change or anything either and if it sounds good with music definitly do it.
if you want to crit my new one in my sig thatd be cool caus i just edited it and stuff so if you wanna check it out that cool. thanks