#1
Kind of a holiday song i wrote all feedback is appriciated! This is an acoustic song ment to be soft-pop-emo hopefully that will help you imagine the "flow" of the song
crit4crit pleeease

Christmas to New Year eve
The snow covered skies
Will bring you to me
kinda Like an angel
Above the christmas tree
Your eyes make me feel
Like a new born king

And when i see the star above
Ill know your thinking of me
Christmas eve oh what a dream
Watching the sun setting

just you and me

Under the mistle toe

Back where the fire glows

just you and me

Under the mistle toe

just you me and some mistle toe...

Just a few more minutes
And we'll start all over again
Counting down all the seconds
Of the years we've forgotten
Seeing what will happen
On this monday morning

And when i see the star above
Ill know your thinking of me
Christmas eve oh what a dream
Watching the sun setting

Christmas to New Year eve
The snow covered skies
Will bring you to me
kinda Like an angel
Above the christmas tree
Your eyes make me feel
Like a new born king
Last edited by Acousticsolo at Jan 7, 2007,
#2
Christmas to New Year eve
The snow covered skies
Will bring you to me
kinda Like an angel instead of kinda you are will be much better
Above the christmas tree
Your eyes make me feel
Like a new born king this line is a bit odd it can be much better



And when i see the star above
Ill know your thinking of me
Christmas eve oh what a dream i liked this line
Watching the sun setting instead of settings sun sets try that

just you and me

Under the mistle toe

Back where the fire glows

just you and me

Under the mistle toe


just you me and some mistle toe...


this was good

Just a few more minutes
And we'll start all over again
Counting down all the seconds
Of the years we've forgotten
Seeing what will happen
On this monday morning

above is good i like that

And when i see the star above
Ill know your thinking of me
Christmas eve oh what a dream
Watching the sun setting

sets instead of setting will be more good

Christmas to New Year eve
The snow covered skies
Will bring you to me
kinda Like an angel
Above the christmas tree
Your eyes make me feel
Like a new born king


othyer than that at some place rhyme is forced flow is ok acoording to my melody
.well thats it i guess and by the way thnx for crit and yeah your crit was constructive
Hi
#3
Christmas to New Year eve
The snow covered skies
Will bring you to me
kinda Like an angel
Above the christmas tree
Your eyes make me feel
Like a new born king Didn't like this line

And when i see the star above
Ill know your thinking of me
Christmas eve oh what a dream
Watching the sun setting I agree sunsets would sound better

just you and me

Under the mistle toe

Back where the fire glows

just you and me

Under the mistle toe

just you me and some mistle toe... Not a bad chorus

Just a few more minutes
And we'll start all over again
Counting down all the seconds
Of the years we've forgotten
Seeing what will happen
On this monday morning I liked this part

And when i see the star above
Ill know your thinking of me
Christmas eve oh what a dream
Watching the sun setting again sunsets ftw

Christmas to New Year eve
The snow covered skies
Will bring you to me
kinda Like an angel
Above the christmas tree
Your eyes make me feel
Like a new born king