#1
I'm am copletely stuck. I wrote a sweet first half, but I can't think of anything worthy of the last half. Any ideas will help. Thanks.

also, I still don't have a title. I'm thinking "Mask Of Morals" but if you think of anything better, that will be great.


I sit behind a mask of morals,
Reality remains hidden.
Acceptance is the only way,
Of self-respect and virtues, I am ridden.


that's all i've got. pathetic, I know, but i'm stuck.

thanks!
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#2
it doesn't match

it should be like this:

b rhymes with b, and a rhymes with a

A
B
A
B

or

A
A
B
B

or

A
B
B
A

get it?

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#3
well i am not gonna help u write but here are some advices


I sit behind a mask of morals,
Reality remains hidden.
Acceptance is the only way,
Of self-respect and virtues, I am ridden.

instead of "Of" try on

as far as ur main problem about stucking is considered just keep urself in that guy place who is really behind mask of morals and try to write what he feels both good and bad ,happy and sad

well cant sugggest u of any title because if i'll tell u i cant write about that hehe
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#4
I know my rhyme pattern is off. I was planning on working on that later.


also, I forgot to say in the original post: the poem is about being ashamed of hiding your true identity from others, so you'll be accepted. if you coudln't figure it out.
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people here are idiot.
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the only good wahs out there are Slashs, Zacks, and Dimebags.
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im to tired and confused to comprehend what you said.
#5
hmmmmm

my core is turning dark and cold

...and i can't think of more

I put my tobacco under my upper lip, just like anyone would do.

Yamaha RGX A2, Fender FM 212R.
#6
could i have

A
A
B
A


would that work?
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people here are idiot.
Quote by Mr_H_MASTER
the only good wahs out there are Slashs, Zacks, and Dimebags.
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im to tired and confused to comprehend what you said.
#7
i don't know.. then it would sound like a rap, since it's one thing that rhymes almost all the time

I put my tobacco under my upper lip, just like anyone would do.

Yamaha RGX A2, Fender FM 212R.
#8
yeah, ur right

I was thinking something like this for the start of the next line

Fueled by paranoia,
Driven by rage.

that sounds cool, but what the hell rhymes with paranoia
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people here are idiot.
Quote by Mr_H_MASTER
the only good wahs out there are Slashs, Zacks, and Dimebags.
Quote by evan1234567
im to tired and confused to comprehend what you said.
#9
use some german maybe? FEUER!

I put my tobacco under my upper lip, just like anyone would do.

Yamaha RGX A2, Fender FM 212R.
#13
OMG!

I saw 11 replies and thought I was onto a Ban goldmine, I'm gutted. :p
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