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this is a song i wrote with a sort of motley crue vibe but i can't think of a title for it. if you've got feedback and/or a title idea i want to hear it

Verse 1
You strut around in six-inch heels
You think you look about seven feet tall
But you know what they say, it’s a hell of way
To go if you’re gonna fall

Verse 2
Blue eye shadow, red fingernails
Looks like you’ve got a plan
But I just think that it’s a shame
That you’re a full-grown man

Chorus
It’s Glitter Time
You’re feelin’ fine
Time to start the show
It’s Glitter Time
You’ve drawn the line
Time for you to blow

Verse 3
When does the weirdness end?
Get down off my back
This is time with you I don’t wanna spend
Get out before I give you a slap

Chorus

Solo

Chorus x2 (lead over second)


p.s. try singing the verses to the tune of the verses in dr feelgood by motley crue - it works quite well...
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Aw dude, this is awesome!

Call it "Dr. Frankenfurter." Seriously. You get bonus points that way - Rocky Horror reference bonus, and Motley Cure reference bonus.
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this is a song i wrote with a sort of motley crue vibe but i can't think of a title for it. if you've got feedback and/or a title idea i want to hear it

Verse 1
You strut around in six-inch heels
You think you look about seven feet tall I would get rid of "about"
But you know what they say, it’s a hell of way
To go if you’re gonna fall

Verse 2
Blue eye shadow, red fingernails
Looks like you’ve got a plan
But I just think that it’s a shame
That you’re a full-grown man disturbing and funny. good rhyme!

Chorus
It’s Glitter Time
You’re feelin’ fine
Time to start the show
It’s Glitter Time
You’ve drawn the line
Time for you to blow Great rhyme pattern for the chorus!!!

Verse 3
When does the weirdness end?
Get down off my back
This is time with you I don’t wanna spend
Get out before I give you a slap the rhyming of back and slap is forced. I would change the last line.
Chorus

Solo

Chorus x2 (lead over second)


p.s. try singing the verses to the tune of the verses in dr feelgood by motley crue - it works quite well...



overall a really funny poem. u did a good job of using motley crue style, especially when you say "blue eye shadow, red finger-nails". it sounds really cool. great song.
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