#1
Killer Bee Sting.

C'mere, C'mere
You've got glass in your eyes
Lay down in the street
Lay down in the street
Your art films and Bukowski
Phonograph and heroin needle
Dark rooms with Kubrick playing
It makes you cry
It makes you cry
Leaves rotting left over from last fall
It makes you cry
It makes you cry.
Wade in the water, child.
#2
minus the "c'mere, c'mere"
this is absolutely a 9.9999 out of ten.
the repetition, the imagery.
those damn artsy college-type folk, man, i know, hah.

actually, no, i'd give this a 7 or an eight, because i kind of want it to be longer.
maybe even just like, one stanza.
but good job anyway.