#1
I wrote this song after I went and played at this bar. The atmosphere was great and it kinda just came I guess. It's a really upbeat song, the verses follow a 12 bar blues pattern there also is no real chorus. just a little 4 bar riff that goes in between.

verse 1
It's about that time again
another days come to an end
ooow, gonna call the boys up
It's already ten past ten
grab the guitar, jump in my car
head on down to my Rock n Roll bar.

verse 2

ooow its time for us to leave our scar
tonights the night, the stage is ours
ooow those friday night lights
make you feel like a city star
get me a drink, you know the tap aint far ( <---- not sure about this line yet )
playing downtown at my Rock N Roll bar.

verse 3

A couple of drinks to stop my shakin knees
got 300 people staring up at me
ooow lets get this show on the road
get me onstage just to set me free ( <---- not sure about this line yet )
blue, broke, pissdrunk, whoever you are
head on down to the Rock n Roll bar.


all critisizm encouraged.

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#2
me=bold


verse 1
It's about that time again
another days come to an end
ooow, gonna call the boys up
It's already ten past ten
grab the guitar, jump in my car
head on down to my Rock n Roll bar.

interchange grab and jump it will be much better
in i st line instead of it's try here comes that time again


verse 2

ooow its time for us to leave our scar
tonights the night, the stage is ours
ooow those friday night lights
make you feel like a city star
get me a drink, you know the tap aint far ( <---- not sure about this line yet )
playing downtown at my Rock N Roll bar.


in this verse some words are forcelly writtern they dont add much meaning . instaed of bolded line

try pour me a drink cos i am not going so far i am playing .... and the last line



verse 3

A couple of drinks to stop my shakin knees
got 300 people staring up at me instead of got more then will be much better
ooow lets get this show on the road
get me onstage just to set me free ( <---- not sure about this line yet )
blue, broke, pissdrunk, whoever you are
head on down to the Rock n Roll bar.
i like these 2 lines


i am just giving suggestions i am srry if i came too harsh on you .its ur song and u have to deciede whats best for it
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