#1
song i did recently. It lacks structure, but thats something I like about it. Suggestions appreciated.
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#2
Not bad. Sounded a bit metalcore-influenced, and kind of In Flames-style with the riffing.
Some parts were good, some not as good. But the acoustic intro I didn't really like. Not that it was crap, just kind of boring.
#3
Wonderful... nothing bad to say at all... love it
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#4
thanks dude. thats probably the best comment i've gotten on a song so far. I'll be sure to crit yours
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#6
hmm.. it was very interesting. it sounded very good, but like you said, it lacked structure. It just kinda seemed like random stuff to me, but it still sounded very nice. and i loved the acoustic intro, very nice. Could your crit mine if you get a chance? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=502836
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#8
I wasnt sure about the original acoustic intro, but it sounds far better with the chords in it. It sounds better distorted, but I'm not sure of the drums go with it very well (Bars 10-13)? The bass on 16-19 is very good, and it seems to make the drum beat work better. The little guitar leads are very good, especially 26-29. The bass on 30-31 reminds me of Cliff Burton, which can only be good. I'm not sure if the slow down bit works very well though, or the solo after it, but the rhythm is good, so it defini9tely has potential. Possibly find a way to slow down the distorted bit, then end it, have a bit of silence, and then bring the acoustic bit back in? At the minute it doesnt flow very well, and seems to come in abruptly. As someone else said it just needs a little bit of tightening (not much though, as you said the lack of structure is good), but just enough that it doesnt seem like random riffs put together.
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