#1
My 2nd attempt at song writing. I started it with a sound like the early Beatles albums in my mind, but it got a little darker as I finished writing it. It's kind of about my mind arguing with itself when I couldn't think of something to write.

You might think all's been written down
Boy, you can be wrong
Take my hand, let's burn this bridge
And I'll play you another song

Cross your Ts and dot your Is
Don't throw that pen away
Listen to me, and I'll tell you all
The things I've got to say

Nothing stays hidden forever
If you got the heart to look
So put yourself back together
And I'll read you another book

You've searched and searched and now you've found
Another way to go
I'll follow you if you lead me
To a place I'd never go

[guitar solo]

I want you to promise me one thing
and I know you'll do it right
Even if it's the last thing you do
Please pass on this advice

Nothing stays hidden forever
If you've got the heart to look
So put yourself back together
And open up a book
#2
yea not a good idea to post your writing on here people will steal it and say how cool they are
#4
Quote by trendkilla101
yea not a good idea to post your writing on here people will steal it and say how cool they are

lol, actually i have come accross a thread that had a song of mine from my myspace that i have never posted on here. so i took the link off.


and bookmarked


ill give you a full crit in the morning.
Last edited by TonyRandall at Jan 11, 2007,
#5
You might think all's been written down
Boy, you can be wrong
Take my hand, let's burn this bridge
And I'll play you another song
............................................goood, starts a story.
Cross your Ts and dot your Is
Don't throw that pen away
Listen to me, and I'll tell you all
The things I've got to say
....................................................good, makes me want to read the rest.
Nothing stays hidden forever
If you got the heart to look
So put yourself back together
And I'll read you another book
.............................................i like this.... great, dont change anything.
You've searched and searched and now you've found
Another way to go
I'll follow you if you lead me
To a place I'd never go
........................................i like this tooo, change nothing...
[guitar solo]

I want you to promise me one thing
and I know you'll do it right
Even if it's the last thing you do
Please pass on this advice
..............................wow, i cant find anything to change, in any part of your song. great job
Nothing stays hidden forever
If you've got the heart to look
So put yourself back together
And open up a book
....................i like it


i wouldnt change a thing. i like it alot!

8/10.


great job


but something tells me that this is NOT your second.... if it is, you should write more often. i think you have alot of skill.