#1
Just to give you a feel this is a slow acoustic song that will have another acoustic guitar accompanying occasionally, would be grateful for all your opinions and will crit for crit- bad or good, coz all opinions help me to improve the song!

Intro:

Some people just like to talk, others prefer countryside walks
Some people sigh and move on, but others are just too far gone
Some people laugh, some people cry, yeah and others they just wave you goodbye

We’re makin the wrong kind of music
We’re takin a trip down memory lane
We’re picking ourselves up, only to fall back down again

Some people judge books by their covers, some people get on with each other
Some people can forget and forgive, for others their heart will not give
Some people hug, some people kiss, it’s the character in everyone that makes the world what it is.

We’re makin the wrong kind of music
We’re takin a trip down memory lane
We’re picking ourselves up, only to fall back down again

Some people will always be friends, others will drive you round the bend
Some people live for the minute, others just can’t wait to finish
Some people live, some people die, it’s the question of life that gets us by

We’re makin the wrong kind of music
We’re takin a trip down memory lane
We’re picking ourselves up, only to fall back down again

Solo-

BRIDGE:

Why pick yourself up, one fall is enough, don’t go back and try and make amends only to fall at the first hurdle once again.

We’re makin the wrong kind of music
We’re takin a trip down memory lane
We’re picking ourselves up, only to fall back down again

Outro:

Lyrics written by Dan Freeman
To be composed by Staying Power

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Last edited by Driveshaft Dan at Jan 11, 2007,
#2
As i cant hear the music I cant tell for sure but it sounds like you've got too many sylables on some lines that might make the melody a bit jerky. 'Only to fall at the first hurdle again' is a good example, you could leave it the same in the bridge as it sounds kool but change it to: 'only to fall back down again' in the chorus. I just think it would flow better.
RhythmGunner
#3
Thanks for your opinion , will change accordingly tonight..... cheers,

Dan
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Any others?...
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DISCO IS DEAD!

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