#1
When the morning light shines down,
I silence your voice, and await the end
Watching the light fade from your eyes,
and totally getting off on it...

I hate you...

DeathGod; I'll erase your existance
Wake up my burning blood
I'll tear you down, and down to the depths
Until you die, or until this ****in' world ends
And to you, just die, ****er die

Inside, I'll keep this grudge
I'll keep this thought, inside
til the very end, I'll hate you...
til the very end

I hate you...

DeathGod; I'll erase your existance
Wake up my burning blood
I'll tear you down, and down to the depths
Until you die, or until this ****in' world ends
And to you, just die, ****er die

I hate you...
**** you

DeathGod; I'll erase you
DeathGod; disgusted
DeathGod; I'll erase you
DeathGod; til the end...

I hate you...

DeathGod; I'll erase your existance
Wake up my burning blood
I'll tear you down, and down to the depths
Until you die, or until this ****in' world ends
And to you, just, die ****er die
#2
Wow, this is something.

Compared to the rest of it, the first verse is pretty bland. I would suggest some stronger verbs and more imagery there. That's really the only suggestion I have besides maybe cutting back on some of the repetition, but I would imagine this could work with the right music. Not the greatest thing, but it's not too bad. Decent job, man.
Cause I love feelin' dirty
And I love feelin' cheap
And I love it when you hurt me
So drive those staples deep