#1
ok so i wrote this song for my band and was wondering how it sounds from some different perspectives..its not all the way finished so any new ideas for it would be great.... im just a bass player so im not expecting much


Been travelin around this road for a long long time
been travelin
trying to clear my mind

Its alright
ooh its ok

another cheap glass of alcohol
rolled another blunt but i smoked it all
one more drug in my vein
gotta stop
before i go insane

its alright
ooh its ok


....thats it for now
#2
Nice song Kind of reminds me of Needle and the Spoon by Lynryd Skynyrd
What kind of style is it gonna be in because i think it would be awsome as a hard rock song

My only problem is with this bit
another cheap glass of alcohol
rolled another blunt but i smoked it all

I dont think the secon line fits how about getting rid of rolled i tihnk that makes it a bit better
another cheap glass of alcohol
another blunt but i smoked it all


Like it carry it on and see how it goes! at the moment though 7/10 at least!!
#3
Just to let you know, these are all original lyrics here. You dont need to put it.

Filth, pure filth... That's what you are.
#4
Quote by Grundy0
Nice song Kind of reminds me of Needle and the Spoon by Lynryd Skynyrd
What kind of style is it gonna be in because i think it would be awsome as a hard rock song

My only problem is with this bit
another cheap glass of alcohol
rolled another blunt but i smoked it all

I dont think the secon line fits how about getting rid of rolled i tihnk that makes it a bit better
another cheap glass of alcohol
another blunt but i smoked it all


Like it carry it on and see how it goes! at the moment though 7/10 at least!!


I agree with this. Even though it is short, I highly enjoy it.

Keep working on it!