#1
Hey everyone, i've been reading the forums for awhile and still havent posted any of my writings, so heres one. This is a short song that i play on my acoustic. It's a slow reggae type beat. The actual guitar goes on for awhile and the lyrics come in at different parts.


The feeling of being dismantled,
Thoughts of being sucked in.
War, chaos, and disorder,
A country full of sin.

Everywhere I turn,
Another shot is heard,
Falling to the ground,
Like the body of a bird.

Now take a look around,
to see what you can't see,
Once filled with love and joy,
Now we're all enemies.

Changes are soon coming,
and they will be for the best.
A fresh, new, healthy world,
Babylon laid to rest.
#2
I like, though 'Like the body of a bird' doesn't sit well with me. Though I'm not a fan of similies using 'like' in songs. But it's a good piece of work, well done.
The will to neither strive nor cry,
The power to feel with others give.
Calm, calm me more; nor let me die
Before I have begun to live.

-Matthew Arnold

Arguments are to be avoided; they are always vulgar and often convincing.