#1
I'm actually quite proud of this one. Normally I'm not too fond of my works, but I put some effort into this. It's an indie rockish song that's semi-upbeat. Let's see if I made it enigmatic enough to conceal the meaning.

Weather Report

Hello, raindrop. Haven't you heard?
The Black Cat caught the Early Bird.
Sol didn't rise and the skies are gray.
Looks like you'll have another wonderful day.

Hello, Sol. Have you seen the skies?
The Worm was set free 'cause you didn't rise.
Forcing black onto paper, pensive thoughts for free;
The nightlife is the right life for the likes of me.

I'm too busy thinking
Of ways to spin the gears.
I'm too busy confusing
Muses with days of the year.
I'm too busy slipping
On ice I failed to break.
So...
Good Morning, Sunshine...

If you need me
I'll be out talking to the rain.
With bruises on my knees
Talking with the rain.
(Ice I failed to break)

I'm too busy thinking
Of ways to spin the gears.
I'm too busy confusing
Muses with days of the year.
I'm too busy slipping
On ice I failed to break.
So...
Good Morning, Sunshine...

Hello, Worm, how's it feel to feel alive?


That last line is supposed to be kind of a closing phrase, but I'm thinking about expanding it.

Crit-for-Crit, be honest. Thanks.
#2
not bad at all, although for the type of song you want to put it too it might be a little too long winded
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#3
That's pretty good. Good rhymes.
P.S. I like your signature. Hilarious

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