#1
And you say,
that it's not worth it,
we've been here for far too long,
and it's not worth risking,
and I don't know,
what you're here for,
but I definitely dont think it's me

and you,
don't know what you do to me,
yeah you,
wil never know,
and I've said it before and I'll say it again,
I won't quit you, so quit asking

Yeah we're good,
but yet not really,
there's still little bits of tension,
in the air,
and I don't think,
that we'll be the same again,
but I won't worry,
so don't you

and you,
don't know what you do to me,
yeah you,
wil never know,
and I've said it before and I'll say it again,
I won't quit you, so quit asking
"there is a man...
playing a violin...
and the strings...
are the veins in his own arm."
#2
28 views....NO comments....real nice
"there is a man...
playing a violin...
and the strings...
are the veins in his own arm."
#3
I'll crit it for you buddy. But I expect one in return!

For the first stanza, you don't need to start it with "and" you can just take that out. The second stanza, "you don't know what you do to me" has been used so many time's, hell I don't know how many times I've used it but I don't like using it. I like the last line of that stanza. The first two lines of the 3rd stanze sound forced the rest of it's good though.

Good job, I hate when you get a lot views and no comments too so I fell you man.

New song's in my sig