#1
I hear the voices
they're in my head
I've seen the prison
And made my bed

it's too late to turn back now

I've seen their faces
a thousand times
you've made yours
and paid for mine

it's too late to come back now

ive got a little problem with the world you see
nothing ever goes right can you disagree
ill just hold on for one more minute
close my eyes and pretend i'm the only one in it.

I felt a difference
When we last met
I didn't say it
Now it's a regret

it's too late to turn back now

I've tasted pleasure
And swallowed pain
They're so much different
And still the same

it's too late to come back now

ive got a little problem with the world you see
nothing ever goes right can you disagree
ill just hold on for one more minute
close my eyes and pretend i'm the only one in it.

The scent of fear
Lies in the air
I'd like to stop and scream
I don't care.

it's too late to turn back now

ive got a little problem with the world you see
nothing ever goes right can you disagree
ill just hold on for one more minute
close my eyes and pretend i'm the only one in it.


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Last edited by roxtar_shock at Jan 19, 2007,
#2
well, its really not bad... good flow, it's not cliche....

I've tasted pleasure
And swallowed pain
They're so much different
And still the same

I love this stanza.... it's awesome

the only think I don't care for in it is the second line of your chorus... the whole "nothing ever goes right can you disagree".... this line just seems forced, really forced if you want to keep the wording maybe just alter it a little? something like
nothing ever works, care to disagree?.... but I dunno.... other than that though, I liked it... overall 8/10... crit4crit? links in sig (also have a new song but no link yet, ill get it later)