#1
Yeah. I just recently got my band together, and this is a work-in-progress song for the band. Crits/suggestions would be great.
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#2
It was good. that first verse was boring though. maybe the natural harmonic was getting a little played out. change it to a pinch harmonic of the same pitch? that may be a cool affect and spice it up a bit.
#3
Yeah, I'm thinking of dropping the harmonics when I get the chorus in. I see what you mean by getting played out. I did kinda abuse them. Haha.
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#4
Yeah, you sure did overuse that harmonic. Other than that, it sounds pretty good. Leave the intro the way it is, but definitely remove the natural harmonics from the verse and chorus. I like ouchies' idea with the pinch harmonics. You should also vary the pitches of them. I don't like how the exact same riff is repeated over and over again in the verse.

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#5
i really liked it, maybe a few two many palmutes, maybe jump off the low d and add a cool progression, aside from that its some realyl good melo death. the harmonic was a little too much, in the beginning it was good, at the end i was tired of it. good riff, cool rhythms, it was just really good. keep it up
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#6
I agree with the harmonic being used too much. Other than that I liked the opening a lot and I think this would be even better if there were drums.
I also really liked the harmonizing guitars in the middle.
#8
^dude stop double posting, you will eventually get banned, use the edit button

Nice song BTW :p
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