#1
This is my first post and this is the first lyric i ever wrote. This is a story about me.
The lyric is kinda child-ish i guess
I have no idea for the title. So i just put whats on my mind.
Can anyone give a suggestion for my title?

Verse 1
I remember when we used to have fun
but that day has past and gone.
Yes, I'll admit that im wrong and u're right
but I wish that we can just have one more night.

Chorus
All I wanted to say is that im sorry.
This is just the beggining of my story.
I don't care what other have to say.
I think of u everynight and day.
All the words I say to you is true.
I'm falling more and more in love with you.
I can't believe that I just let you go.
I hope a better day awaits tomorrow.

Verse 2
To be honest, I will never stop loving you
until the trees and grass turns blue.
The sky is clear and we can see the sun.
Till the end of the day I knew you were the one.

Chorus
All I wanted to say is that im sorry.
This is just the beggining of my story.
I don't care what other have to say.
I think of u everynight and day.
All the words I say to you is true.
I'm falling more and more in love with you.
I can't believe that I just let you go.
I hope a better day awaits tomorrow.

Bridge
Now that I know you meant to me
than anything else that i see.
I will hold on to u like never before.
Like never before...

Chorus
All I wanted to say is that im sorry.
This is just the beggining of my story.
I don't care what other have to say.
I think of u everynight and day.
All the words I say to you is true.
I'm falling more and more in love with you.
I can't believe that I just let you go.
I hope a better day awaits tomorrow.

Chorus/Outro
All I wanted to say is that im sorry.
This is just the beggining of my story.
I don't care what other have to say.
I think of u everynight and day.
All the words I say to you is true.
I'm falling more and more in love with you.
I can't believe that I just let you go.
I hope a better day awaits tomorrow.


Last edited by evalix at Jan 18, 2007,
#2

me=bold

Verse 1
I remember when we used to have fun
but that day has past and gone.
Yes, I'll admit that im wrong and u're right
but I wish that we can just have one more night.


2nd line is a bit odd


Chorus
All I wanted to say is that im sorry.
This is just the beggining of my story.
I don't care what other have to say.
I think of u everynight and day.
All the words I say to you is true.
I'm falling more and more in love with you.
I can't believe that I just let you go.
I hope a better day awaits tomorrow.




chorus is ok but not gr8 . its a cliche


Verse 2
To be honest, I will never stop loving you
until the trees and grass turns blue.
this i liked
The sky is clear and we can see the sun.
Till the end of the day I knew you were the one.

Chorus
All I wanted to say is that im sorry.
This is just the beggining of my story.
I don't care what other have to say.
I think of u everynight and day.
All the words I say to you is true.
I'm falling more and more in love with you.
I can't believe that I just let you go.
I hope a better day awaits tomorrow.

Bridge
Now that I know you meant to me
than anything else that i see.
I will hold on to u like never before.
Like never before...

Chorus
All I wanted to say is that im sorry.
This is just the beggining of my story.
I don't care what other have to say.
I think of u everynight and day.
All the words I say to you is true.
I'm falling more and more in love with you.
I can't believe that I just let you go.
I hope a better day awaits tomorrow.

Chorus/Outro
All I wanted to say is that im sorry.
This is just the beggining of my story.
I don't care what other have to say.
I think of u everynight and day.
All the words I say to you is true.
I'm falling more and more in love with you.
I can't believe that I just let you go.
I hope a better day awaits tomorrow.





overall not bad for first song read tips thread and chorus is a bit huge for verse like that other than that its ok 7/10
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