#1
We gambled it all away
Just to see what we could get
Won't you say it's not to late
Cause right now I'm a hopeless wreck

I didn't want to scare you
I just hate to see you go
You really understand me
Better than anyone I know

This doesn't have to end here
Let's forget and start like new
I think that's how it should be
But that decision's up to you

We gambled it all away
Just to see what we could get
Won't you say it's not too late
Cause right now I'm a hopeless wreck

My heart's out on the line now
I'm still waiting for your call
The chance is under zero
That we're getting up from our fall

We gambled it all away
Just to see what we could get
Won't you say it's not too late
Cause right now I'm a hopeless wreck

Cause right now I'm a hopeless wreck
Cause right now I'm a hopeless wreck
Cause right now I'm a hopeless wreck
Cause right now I'm a hopeless wreck
#2
We gambled it all away
Just to see what we could get
Won't you say it's not to late
Cause right now I'm a hopeless wreck

I don't know what is up with the chorus. I can't tell if theres is no rhyme scheme or if there is a certain way you say wreck. Last line is alittle long. Might want to take out a few words.

I didn't want to scare you
I just to see you go
You really understand me
Better than anyone I know

Hate is a very cliche'd word. You can use a thesaurus on Microsoft word to find a better word. Rest of it is good. I like the XAXA rhyme schemes.

This doesn't have to end here
Let's forget and start like new
I think that's how it should be
But that decision's up to you

This is a standard sounding verse. Might want to spice it up a bit. Put some emotion into it. But it is original, which is a +.

We gambled it all away
Just to see what we could get
Won't you say it's not too late
Cause right now I'm a hopeless wreck

My heart's out on the line now
I'm still waiting for your call
The chance is under zero
That we're getting up from our fall

This verse flowed well to me. It really got the main idea of your chorus across. And now I'm thinking it is an emo song, a -. But it still won't influence the Crit.

We gambled it all away
Just to see what we could get
Won't you say it's not too late
Cause right now I'm a hopeless wreck

Cause right now I'm a hopeless wreck
Cause right now I'm a hopeless wreck
Cause right now I'm a hopeless wreck
Cause right now I'm a hopeless wreck

I don't really care for repeating lines, unless it is supposed to be a echo. You might want to alternate beteen two different lines so the listener doesn't get bored.
Over all I give it a 8/10. It was original with few cliche's.
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#3
Thanks that was constructive
Did you have to call it emo though?
I'l try and fix it
#4
My bad if it wasn't emo. It just seemed like it because it was talking about a relationship gone bad.
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