#1
http://www.myspace.com/jakeskubisz

"a stupid love song"

guitar is recorded and my voice breaks up a little when i sing it (i kind of did that on purpose though, i wanted it to sound kind of weak and pathetic)

i hope you enjoy it at least, and crits are welcome
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#3
i like the guitar part alot but the vocals im a little ifffy on but its not bad

could u crit me please
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#4
I quite liked that, the vocals were nicely worded, and the guitar is lovely.
#5
thanks everyone its really reassuring when getting crits... even when they're saying something is a little off and i need to work on it. honestly, its better than nobody saying anything.
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#6
thanks everyone its really reassuring when getting crits... even when they're saying something is a little off and i need to work on it. honestly, its better than nobody saying anything.

Yeah, I know how you feel man;

Anyway, on to the song; I loved it, your vocals at the end(around 2:45) seem to skip a bit, like sound wise; Your voice isn't too bad, the guitar was really "crisp" as someone else said, and I really liked the words, especially the chorus "I feel like the shit behind a shooting star" it's really quite true of how you can feel sometimes, so that was one of those really clever lines in the song; Anyway, great job man and thanks for the crit!
#7
Hmmmmm interesting. I started listening to it, and immediately vaguely disliked it, but as it went on it grew on me. By the time it got to about 2:00, I vaguely liked it. It has something. It reminded me of something that might be used in a film soundtrack or something. Maybe a Wes Anderson film. And that's a positive by the way. The guitar is simple but effective.

Liked the picky outro too. And the lyric.

Not bad at all!


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#8
Pretty good!
The chords you use are rare, it reminds me of The Kinks (which is a good thing.)
Like everyone has said, your voice needs some work
But your style is incredible.

I just added you on myspace
It would be great if you could crit my recordings!
I have a thread.
#9
Thats guys (and gals ). I actually like the Kinks a lot. The verse chords are really generic, but the chorus chords are a bit inventive I guess, if thats a word haha. I listened to them heavily when I started to write... they are a great band.
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