#1
The day was young when I went down
And the world became a blur of green and brown
A bullet to the chest and I was laying with the rest
Who gave their lives
For peace

What if there was another way
Than maybe the world could give it a try
And maybe, just maybe, no one else will have to die
For peace

I gave up my future
I wasted my past
Now the only future I have
Are flowers and flowers by the basket
And mother weeping over a golden casket

The pain is increasin’
And I hope this isn’t treason
But as death draws near, I think I hear
My conscious saying
That wars a waste
And that this world needs a taste
Of peace

What if there was another way
Then maybe the world could give it a try
And maybe, just maybe, no one else will have to die
For peace

On my tombstone it’ll say:
Maybe, just maybe the fighting will end
So never again
Will anyone die
For peace
"Imagine all the people, sharing all the world"
-John Lennon
#2
I like it. It seems quite emotional.
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#3

The day was young when I went down
And the world became a blur of green and brown
A bullet to the chest and I was laying with the rest
Who gave their lives
For peace I like it, it seems very emotional and personal, and I'm sure many others can relate to it

What if there was another way
Than maybe the world could give it a try
And maybe, just maybe, no one else will have to die
For peace Interesting IMO, definately gets the reader/listener to think, but does seem a bit cliche

I gave up my future
I wasted my past
Now the only future I have
Are flowers and flowers by the basket
And mother weeping over a golden casket Don't say future twice like that, it makes it sound elementary IMO

The pain is increasin’ actually use the G at the end, it'll sound much better
And I hope this isn’t treason
But as death draws near, I think I hear
My conscious saying
That wars a waste
And that this world needs a taste
Of peace Flows really nice IMO, I wouldn't change it except for that G

What if there was another way
Then maybe the world could give it a try
And maybe, just maybe, no one else will have to die
For peace

On my tombstone it’ll say:
Maybe, just maybe the fighting will end
So never again
Will anyone die
For peace

I like it, a bit cliche but it flows nice and others can relate to it, 8/10 IMO. Could you crit mine when you get the chance? Thanks (see my sig)