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This one is just to get away from the whole girly writing thing that i have going on. Although I do have about three more of them, each of varying quality. This one is short, and easy to read though. If the form annoys you, sorry. Bukowski has a book called "You Get So Alone Sometimes That Is Just Makes Sense". I've never read it. But the title has always affected me.

Sometimes

sometimes
when you look to the edge of the sky
the stars
don't look quite
real
in fact, it
seems
like
God
hung a lantern from the ceiling of the world
like a crucifix
just to show that
he can

and

sometimes
when you sit on the edge of the pier
and hear a splash
like
a wallet falling into the water
currency devalued
it sounds like
someone is
giving up
or
maybe
learning to live
in fact, it
sounds
like
freedom

sometimes
you get so
confused and frustrated and


alone


that it just makes
sense
to call your
ex
best
friend

and

when the answer-phone
clicks on
scream

because

sometimes

words
are not
enough


Leave well alone
Last edited by benjmc at Jan 21, 2007,
#2
sometimes
when you sit on the edge of the pier
and hear a splash
like
a wallet falling into the water
currency devalued

This i like a lot... its a great image, great writing. The rest i'm not so fond of to be honest. but keep writing
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