#1
Dear were have you been
I’ve have waited for your return from war
I prayed for your safety
Day and night
I begged god for you
When I knew you wouldn’t

Darling I am writing you from the trenches
Of a bloody field
I don’t know if this will see the light of day
But I do know that I fought valiantly for you
Have you been praying for me?
Because if I go I want to watch over you
With my wings of gold wrapped around your chest

Well here I am standing above your grave
But not for long I can feel my knees shaking
God must have had more inportent things then you
But I hope someone heard those prayers

Honey do you feel my arms wrapped around you
If only my arms could hold you up
But strength is what you need
Now find that in prayer so that
I can hold you again
#4
somehow the title doesnt seem to fit. But i liked the title tho.. i have a similiar situation to that.
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#5
Dear were have you been
I’ve have waited for your return from war
I prayed for your safety
Day and night
I begged god for you
When I knew you wouldn’t

Id like to see some punctuation here, mainly cause it reads weird without it. And seriously you should check the piece for mistakes L1 "were=where" L2 "I've have= I've or I have". Capitalise "God" Overall its a pretty nice opening, sets the piece up well, yet remains elusive.

Darling I am writing you from the trenches
Of a bloody field
I don’t know if this will see the light of day
But I do know that I fought valiantly for you
Have you been praying for me?
Because if I go I want to watch over you
With my wings of gold wrapped around your chest

The last line went a bit too far for me. The rest worked well, I liked the perspective change. Nothing much more, theres nothing concrete to comment on. L4 bugged me in as much as "But I do know" its utterly useless, you know cause its your thought. Perhaps say "but you should know I fought..."

Well here I am standing above your grave
But not for long I can feel my knees shaking
God must have had more inportent things then you
But I hope someone heard those prayers

L3 "Important" and "then=than" And to be honest you wouldn't stand "above" a grave, on perhaps, beside more likely. Again the content is there but there nothing solid to make me remember it.

Honey do you feel my arms wrapped around you
If only my arms could hold you up
But strength is what you need
Now find that in prayer so that
I can hold you again

I think I have issues with the prayer part here, its stolen the focus from everything else. You dont need the "but" in L3. Use "for" if anything. Overall nice piece, nothing more. More emotion if anything, I feel like a narrator and thus have no emotional attatchment to either character.

peACE

theres a piece in my sig under "my writing"
Filth, pure filth... That's what you are.