#1
No tears left
eyes cried out
drained and empty
you can't even shout
you tried to ease the pain again
but you learned your blade's no longer your best friend

this time it left you worse off
than you'd ever been
of white walls you were never a fan
but that's just yet another punishment for your sin

arms tied around you
legs bound to the floor
they're guessing you are crazy
or that's what they say you're in here for

those scars on your arm prove them all right
they'll never disappear. they'll never leave your sight
so why make more memories
implanted on your skin
when later all they do is open a door
they'll remind you of the anguish you felt
and make you want to create even more


it is not finished yet but lemme know wat u think so far... thanks in advance! C4C, too!
Why do I let myself drown n the tears Ive cried4u over&over again When I know that u wont rescue me?
THE HARDEST GIFT2GIVE IS LOVE U KNOW IS NOT RETURNED
Whats the point n smilin if u hav no1 2smile4
#2
nothing? Lol... ok then well maybe u could help me think of a new title..... i need one, i think.
Why do I let myself drown n the tears Ive cried4u over&over again When I know that u wont rescue me?
THE HARDEST GIFT2GIVE IS LOVE U KNOW IS NOT RETURNED
Whats the point n smilin if u hav no1 2smile4
#3
it's good... melodramatic. It hooked me up with the direct way you wrote the lyrics. The way I picture it, the music's gonna be having a little gloomy atmosphere... Correct me if I'm wrong.
#4
OH YEAH very gloomy haha... THANKS for the comment u were the first one
Why do I let myself drown n the tears Ive cried4u over&over again When I know that u wont rescue me?
THE HARDEST GIFT2GIVE IS LOVE U KNOW IS NOT RETURNED
Whats the point n smilin if u hav no1 2smile4
#5
so why make more memories
implanted on your skin


That's probably the best line, and at best it decent. You ought to use some metaphor, instead of using cliche stuff like cutting. I didn't like this, but keep writing with the intentions to improve, and you'll get better.