#1
Yo lemme know if ya'll think this is creepy or anything... haha any comments or suggestions are welcome... if you crit mine ill crit yours. thnx in advance

All I never want to be is lonely.
Have another drink and I'll be fine.
I can't seem to forget about you,
I keep finding you on my mind.

It's the possibilities that stick with me,
Have another drink and I'll be fine.
When she laughs she laughs so loud,
And she can smile with her eyes.

So i sit with these ghosts in my head,
Playing with my thoughts.
Throwing them on the paper,
But its all turning up in shades of gray.

I miss her even though i see her most everyday.
I'll have another drink to be OK.
I could've held her all night if she wanted to stay,
But she thinks my arms feel like chains

So i sit with these ghosts in my head,
Playing with my thoughts.
Throwing them on the paper,
But its all turning up in shades of gray.
"the world will not know true peace until the power of love overcomes the love of power"
-Jimi Hendrix
Last edited by ellisguitarman at Jan 25, 2007,
#2
Have another drink and I'll be fine


That line is strikingly similar to Fallen Leaves, by Billy Talent. Instead of drinking they use drugs, however.
#3
But anyways... Is this about a girl, or about your drinking problem? Every second line is about drinking, and if you're going to repeat a line over and over, make it clever.
#4
its about dealing with getting over a grl... no drinking problem.
"the world will not know true peace until the power of love overcomes the love of power"
-Jimi Hendrix
#5
anyone have anything to say?
"the world will not know true peace until the power of love overcomes the love of power"
-Jimi Hendrix